April 18 2012,
Once there was a lost kingdom a dragon was lost too no one knew where the dragon was?
But one day someone did know he was bob he knew so one day when he got in he saw the
dragon slowly stirred.
He did not know what to do but he did see a $10.000.000 crown but the dragon was holding it so
he took it but right at that moment he ran fast as he could.
the dragon was soon awake he heard something he caught him and bob were so happy they were friends!
7 comments:
You did great!
Jasmine
thanks jasmine!
from monika
Hi Monika, thank you for entering your 100wc, I really enjoyed reading it. I just hope the dragon doesn't go after Bob, you have really left me wondering.
Next time do make sure you read your work through carefully to ensure all your sentences make sense and are punctuated.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs McGuinnity (Team100wc)
Thanks Mrs.mcguinnity thanks for cheaking out our blog and thank you so much for commenting my 100 word challged!(:
Monika
That is really good Monika!! All you need to work on though is check your sentences and punctuation!
Lillie
Hi Monika
I enjoyed reading your story about the dragon. I think maybe Bob deserves to have a capital letter for his name! Your story would be even better if you put just a bit more punctuation in - so that your readers would knoow when each sentence ends!
Dear Lorely,
I will check that! But thanks for reminding me! I vist your blog and it's awesome!
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